Geese glide on snow meltOtter tumble through wet slate
Beaver bog in spring
Beaver bog in spring
The photo of my beloved beaver bog was taken Saturday morning, 19 April 2008. For Sandy: see the snow in the woods? Still here, everywhere. The otter are back and even though they were swimming slowly it was still too quick for me to capture on camera. Besides the goose and gander here, there is a red-winged blackbird on the drowned tree. Please click on the photo in order to see the beauty here. There is no better spot on earth to inspire haiku as here. I think that this is my best haiku at this time. Gentle constructive critiques will be appreciated. I am understanding a little about the form of haiku now and I got a book this week.
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Lovely phto and Haiku, definitely requires a closer look! Very nice.
ReplyDeleteI am jealous of the otters. Can I come see them?
I should send YOU my manuscript instead of M. You might like it--otters play a central role.
Oops sorry I spelled PHOTO wrong, I'm not a good proofreader.
ReplyDeleteI just looked again, what a lovely place, wish I were THERE!
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ReplyDeleteBeaver bogs create an abundant world. They are good and generous critters, and the activity on a bog is both plentiful and somehow subtle. And it's all in this photo and in this wonderful poem.
This photo makes me think of renewal as the world comes to life again in the bog. Very nice. I love the earthy colours.
ReplyDeleteAwesome photo, and from what I can tell, very nice haiku.
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This looks very much like the place I shot this afternoon. It is about 5 minutes from my home. Even the cast of characters is similar - geese, beaver, red-wings, and today I watched a heron in a tree for almost twenty minutes. When a red-wing grabbed my attention in another direction, I turned the camera away, and when I turned back the heron was gone. The shot is lovely.
ReplyDeleteIndeed, there is beauty all around us. Our only responsibility is to see and try to understand ... and appreciate.
ReplyDeleteThe Big Ass Grapes I suspect were probably imported from Chile. We certainly are not growing them locally at this time of year. As for weather, I hope it doesn't catch up with you and spoil your fun.
Thanks for your visit.
A splendid photograph - well worth clicking on for a proper look.
ReplyDeletesome (technical) notes on the haiku (as requested) - at first glimpse I thought we had three actions here - geese, otter and beaver, but of course (and your comments confirm) beaver are not actioned in the poem but denote the setting - so you have the two actions only which is excellent -- "in spring" - this phrase is redundant - you've used the kigo (season word) "snow melt" which immediately tells the reader we are in spring so you don't need to repeat this.
I'd suggest this might be improved by a little inversion along the lines of
beaver bog
otter tumble through wet slate
geese glide on snow melt
setting the place first and then leading us into the actions and leaving us with the action rather than dumping us back on the ground.
This crits are notes and in no way detract from the splendidness of your haiga.
PS - by all means use a capital letter at the very beginning if you must - but DO NOT use caps at the start of lines 2/3
..geese,otter or beaver/no better self believer!Ackworth Born ..
ReplyDeletethanks for initiating the criticism,and of course to andree,for making it possible..
I like this very much.
ReplyDeleteFully agree that you don't need to tell us it is spring.
Color is everywhere here! From your view, to the sky's reflection on earth, and the colorful world of its inhabitants! I love this!
ReplyDeleteThis is lovely. The poem captures your love of the place as well as its vitality and life. It was fun clicking on the larger image and seeing the red wing blackbird and the snow. I can see why you love the spot. Looking forward to seeing otters when you catch them.
ReplyDeleteWonderfully visual words and the beaver bog (love those words) makes it even better.
ReplyDeleteWhat a glorious image and such a peaceful one, too. Ah, otters, I so do wish I could have been sitting there watching them!
ReplyDeleteKeep reminding me it IS spring; I'll say it like a mantra. Thank you for this - it's beautiful in image and in words. I feel as if I am standing there looking at the pond.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the animal imagery. Great Photo.
ReplyDeleteExcellent.
Nice photo, links well with the haiku written. I'm new to One Single Impression as well as poem writing. Hope to meet more bloggers with similar interest. :)
ReplyDeleteVery nice! Lots of activity in the bog and energy in the haiku!
ReplyDeleteWhat a lovely photo! The haiku describes it so well, too.
ReplyDeleteI can see why this place inspires you, it would me too. Couldn't you just stand there all day?
ReplyDeleteI adore this! My perspective is in such stunning contrast to yours; I get the beavers year round here in the south, but the Canadain Geese only is spring. Of course we have no snow melt here in the deep south.
ReplyDeleteI must plan a trip to Vermont to explore the wonderful differences someday. Thank you, Andrée, this is just wonderful!
Great haiku and I am very jealous of you for all the cute creatures you get to see there. Otters, in particular.
ReplyDeleteOkay, the color I get is green with envy. Lovely setting. Lovely photo. Magnificent ku.
ReplyDeleteonce i clicked on the bigger picture it opened a whole new world... i can only imagine the beauty that fills your eyes upon a quiet morning... can i have some 2...
ReplyDeleteGreat place to sit and be.
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