One Single Impression: Descent

I have three versions of this haiku and I don’t know which is clearer. Perhaps you can help. I don’t know which version is better haiku form. The tumbles version is the one I prefer, but I think the grammar may be incorrect without punctuation. And I realize that punctuation is frowned on in haiku (from what I have read).

 

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